10 Oct 2014

The Mistake

I am writing my first ever piece of flash fiction in response to this week's The Prompt. I have tried to do it as the 100 word challenge.

"You are making a mistake." The words rang in her ears. Coming from those closest to her, they had impaled her conscience like a blazing arrow. 

Now, as the sharp pain seared through her fragile body, she could not help but think that perhaps this was a mistake. Too late to do anything about, but a mistake nevertheless.

She let out a blood-curdling scream as the next wave of agony swept away all conscious thought. A desperate attempt to quell the rising tide of despair that was engulfing her.

There was nobody to hear. She was alone. With her mistake.


mumturnedmom

9 comments:

  1. Really like this...
    Short and punchy, which I guess is the idea of flash fiction lol
    It's that good, I would have happily read more. X

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  2. I do love flash fiction because of the inevitable ambiguity it often brings-so many possible interpretations. I found myself thinking about the possible mistakes it could have been and i love the phrase 'implied her conscience'.

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  3. A great post -especially as your first piece of flash fiction, and in 100 words -impressive! #ThePrompt

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  4. Ooh thats made me want to read more. Wonder whats happened to her.

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  5. Gripping stuff and well done for getting it written in 100 words! Is she giving birth (and presumably her family disapproved of the pregnancy)? #theprompt

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  6. Wow Vai intense writing. I could never go through child birth alone, the thought terrifies me more than the pain itself! Great first attempt lovely #ThePrompt

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  7. I'm also guessing child birth! Love this, as Iona says, I love the ambiguity that comes with flash fiction, and this is impressively done in 100 words x Thanks so much for linking your first piece of flash fiction up to #The Prompt :)

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  8. Well, honestly, i dont know much about flash fiction, but i love reading... and your piece was engaging... Well written :)

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  9. Terrifying (in a good way). I sort of want to know what the mistake was but kind of really enjoyed the mystery. Fab.

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